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  • Oh I do know about that, I’ve had a near death experience myself, your body/brain has an uncanny sense that says “you are dangling over the precipice right now.”

    I just mean that until it actually happens, there is no true confirmation, and after, you can’t report back, that’s why it’s called a mystery.

    In fact from the way that person is talking it sounds like they may have had such an experience, and maybe now they’re doubting that it’s real.




  • Excrubulent@slrpnk.nettoLemmy Shitpost@lemmy.worldSrsly
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    11 days ago

    Yeah, that scans for me. It breaks up “getting ready…for a night out”, but I think it works.

    I think honestly it’s just a reality that, if brevity is the soul of wit, then a punchy sentence needs to be compact and that means you need to get a bit funky with the grammar, so maybe the audience has to do a little work.

    Maybe also “at which” is fine too, and I was just overthinking it.

    One thing I won’t bend on is that “to be starting to get ready” is objectively worse in every respect and is the main thing that throws people about the sentence.


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    12 days ago

    This is a slightly wacky sentence. It’s not wrong - it does make sense and communicates the idea, it just forces you to do a bit of work to straighten it out in your head.

    I think the biggest issue is the way they unnecessarily used present continuous tense with “be starting to get”.

    It’s convoluted and adds syllables. You could eliminate the “be” and “to” entirely and change it to “start getting”. That starts with an active verb which feels stronger and more natural.

    So then it would be:

    “This can’t possibly be the same 9pm I used to start getting ready for a night out at”.

    That preserves the flow & punch of the delivery but shortens & simplifies it a lot without losing anything imo.

    Also ending a sentence with a preposition can be awkward. You read “at” and you need to refer it back to 9pm near the start of the sentence. Plus it comes after another preposition, which itself is not acting as a preposition but as part of the nouned phrase “night out”, so you end up with “out at”. Again, not wrong, but it can be awkward. I think using “at which” can move it closer to the noun it’s referring to but it’s not necessarily better that way.

    Make that change and it’s, “This can’t possibly be the same 9pm at which I used to start getting ready for a night out”.

    It’s a little easier to parse, but honestly I think it loses something, because it doesn’t have a casual delivery. “At which” is evidence that the sentence was very deliberately constructed. It adds a syllable and loses some punch. I’d stick with just the first change personally.











  • Excrubulent@slrpnk.nettoLemmy Shitpost@lemmy.worldI'm gonna mute this one
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    19 days ago

    That was me, actually, and I didn’t run out, it is still valid. You are denying that we should criticise the dems for their genocide, and you haven’t gone back on that. That is a kind of genocide denial.

    Your entire point in calling me a pedophile was that you literally could not substantiate it. You were talking out of your ass. You were done with any sort of argument.

    It’s amazing that you don’t see what that says about you, just like you don’t seem to see what an absolute repudiation of the democrats it is to say that it is useless to accuse them of genocide because the choices in your “democracy” cannot exclude genocide.

    And you wonder why so many people stayed home.

    It was already turbo genocide, and the idea that what’s happening now is somehow worse is just your fantasy.